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Khanster0001`s Avatar
Rating Orb Khanster0001 15 United Kingdom MelancholicSanguine 40C 17F
6 years ago | (0)
As I have been told by many English teachers, my sentence structure definitely needs work. I tried my best to make it sound smooth; but I'm not so sure it is.
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Rating Orb Jakers 18 Australia PhlegmaticMelancholic 39C 3F
6 years ago | (1)
It's just a bit clunky, and reading your responses to comments, I don't think you actually speak like that. The problem with your sentence structure is that it sounds unnatural, so just write it as if you're saying it to one of your friends. That way, you'll get a nicely flowing paragraph, and if you fill it with the kind of content that this review contains, you can't go wrong.